Bài mẫu IELTS Writing Task 2: Children spend hours every day on their smartphones

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By Nguyễn Huyền

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Dịch đề: Một số trẻ em dành hàng giờ mỗi ngày trên điện thoại thông minh của chúng. Tại sao? Bạn nghĩ rằng đây là một sự phát triển tích cực hay tiêu cực?

Mở bài

Một trong những cách hữu hiệu nhất để làm mở bài là mình sẽ paraphrase lại đề thi.

Đối với đề này mình có thể paraphrase như sau:

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Vậy là mình đã có một mở bài hoàn chỉnh:

We are living in a technology-driven world where high-tech gadgets have become an indispensable part of our lives. There are a number of reasons why children spend a large proportion of their time scrolling through their smartphones, and in my opinion, this has a detrimental impact on their health and social lives.

Chúng ta đang sống trong một thế giới được thúc đẩy bởi công nghệ nơi các thiết bị công nghệ cao đã trở thành một phần không thể thiếu trong cuộc sống của chúng ta. Có một số lý do khiến trẻ em dành phần lớn thời gian để lướt điện thoại và theo tôi, điều này có tác động bất lợi đến sức khỏe và đời sống xã hội của chúng.

Thân bài

Outline thân bài

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Thân bài hoàn chỉnh

Từ outline trên chúng ta có thể viết thành hai đoạn Body như sau:

Social media and gaming apps are the main reasons why children are addicted to their phones. Several decades ago, when phones were equipped with only a few basic functions like calling and texting, it was rare to see children spend hours on their phones. Smartphones, nowadays, however, are packed with various addictive applications, and one of them is social media apps. Apps like TikTok and Facebook, for example, use sophisticated artificial intelligence to track user behavior, which is effective in grabbing children’s attention and keeping them hooked for long periods of time. Regarding gaming apps, once a child has started a game, it is hard to stop because each game is designed to be addictive, offering attractive prizes to encourage the player to proceed to the next level. Not many children can resist the temptation to click on the ‘continue’ button to gain a big prize that is always there waiting for them.

I believe that this trend can have an adverse effect on children’s health. The blue light of mobile phones is damaging to the eyes, causing various problems like eye irritation and poor vision. Moreover, cell phone addiction can lead to numerous health issues in the long run, such as fatigue and sleep disorders. Excessive use of phones also affects children’s social lives. They might have thousands of online friends, but only a few friends in the real world who are willing to support them in times of need. In addition, spending quality time with friends in person is one of the best ways for children to develop social skills, like communication, negotiation, and problem solving, which they have little chance to learn in their virtual worlds.

Kết bài

Chốt lại các ý chính đã nêu ở phần thân bài:

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Vậy là ta đã có một kết bài như sau:

In conclusion, social media and gaming apps are the main culprits of excessive use of phones among children, and this results in various health problems and hinder children’s social development.

Tóm lại, các ứng dụng mạng xã hội và trò chơi là thủ phạm chính khiến trẻ em sử dụng điện thoại quá nhiều và điều này dẫn đến nhiều vấn đề sức khỏe và cản trở sự phát triển xã hội của trẻ.

Bài mẫu hoàn chỉnh

We are living in a technology-driven world where high-tech gadgets have become an indispensable part of our lives. There are a number of reasons why children spend a large proportion of their time scrolling through their smartphones, and in my opinion, this has a detrimental impact on their health and social lives.

Social media and gaming apps are the main reasons why children are addicted to their phones. Several decades ago, when phones were equipped with only a few basic functions like calling and texting, it was rare to see children spend hours on their phones. Smartphones, nowadays, however, are packed with various addictive applications, and one of them is social media apps. Apps like TikTok and Facebook, for example, use sophisticated artificial intelligence to track user behavior, which is effective in grabbing children’s attention and keeping them hooked for long periods of time. Regarding gaming apps, once a child has started a game, it is hard to stop because each game is designed to be addictive, offering attractive prizes to encourage the player to proceed to the next level. Not many children can resist the temptation to click on the ‘continue’ button to gain a big prize that is always there waiting for them.

I believe that this trend can have an adverse effect on children’s health. The blue light of mobile phones is damaging to the eyes, causing various problems like eye irritation and poor vision. Moreover, cell phone addiction can lead to numerous health issues in the long run, such as fatigue and sleep disorders. Excessive use of phones also affects children’s social lives. They might have thousands of online friends, but only a few friends in the real world who are willing to support them in times of need. In addition, spending quality time with friends in person is one of the best ways for children to develop social skills, like communication, negotiation, and problem solving, which they have little chance to learn in their virtual worlds.

In conclusion, social media and gaming apps are the main culprits of excessive use of phones among children, and this results in various health problems and hinder children’s social development.

(written by Huyen Nguyen, improved by David S. Wills)

Từ vựng hay

  • technology-driven = dependent on technology
  • gadget = a small tool or device that does something useful: tiện ích
  • indispensable = too important to be without: không thể thiếu
  • have a detrimental impact on … = have a negative effect on …: có ảnh hưởng có hại lên …
  • equip somebody/something with … = to provide a person or a place with objects that are necessary for a particular purpose: trang bị cho ai đó/ thứ gì đó ….
  • artificial intelligence = the ability of a computer or computer-controlled robot to perform tasks commonly associated with intelligent beings: trí tuệ nhân tạo
  • temptation = the desire to do or have something that you know is bad or wrong: sự cám dỗ
  • fatigue = a feeling of being extremely tired: sự mệt mỏi
  • in times of need = when help is needed: khi cần tới sự giúp đỡ
  • virtual world = images, sounds and text used by a computer to create a world where people can communicate with each other, play games and pretend to live another life: thế giới ảo
  • culprits = a person or thing responsible for causing a problem: thủ phạm
  • hinder = to make it difficult for somebody to do something or for something to happen: cản trở
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